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Rate these freestyle bars on 1-10 (PLEASE)?

I posted this earlier, but more people are online now
one being the worst, ten being the best: rate it 1-10
I came up with these randomly. three seperate sets of bars. Imma finish the best one:
Bars#1:
There aint no such thing as bad people
just mistakes
dont get me wrong there can be snakes
karma works slow on them
but, dont worry that Bych will be controllin them
givin them what she owes them
like ????? (tryin to come up with a similie)
Bar set 2: So if life’s a bit*h
and Karma is too
are they freinds, are they cool
or at each othes necks
can’t wait to wreck each other’s plans
is that sh*t scams, or 100% real? (unfinished)
Bar set 3: Is it possible
that life is just an illusion, the maya
and things become clearer when you get
higher and higher
finally, you’ll come back dowh
don’t remember what you heard or sound
or what you found… out
mind’s headed south (unfinished)
which one should i finish, or should i give it up? be as blunt as you want. i need the truth if i suck. anything i can improve on? any tips
I’ve only wrote like 6 verses EVER, so yeah, im prety new to this

5 COMMENTS

  1. Im personally thinking a 5. aint good aint bad. Lacks thought. I personally wouldnt post anything unfinished. If it WERE amazing, someone could tkae it and make it their own. next thing you know. Boom. Your stuff stolen. I think you have potential. I like where your heads at with the idea. karmas not often enough talked about, and I think with some work, you could possibly write some good stuff. Might be more of a freestyle/spoken word poet, then a mc, but alot of those are interchangeable. For a good example of what your trying to do check out Saul Williams. Id keep at it man. even the bluntness of people on here shouldnt kill your dream if you want to write.

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