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R-R-Time to reflect–opinion.c/c?

Breathe in deeply,sea salted air
rest your mind,so you might share
a moment or two,you’ll be unaware
as life comes slowly,without a care
Rush of the sea,soothing attained
fills your senses,then silence remains
another comes quickly,continuous waves
scarred souls drink,sound then fades
Ebb and flow of life now calm,it seems
echos your heart,your soul,your dreams
time to reflect,with nature’s sounds
spiritual awakening,will be profound
Rush of silence,after waves crash
fills the void,of wars angered lash
and heals the wounds a soldier has
captures his mind,from war at last
thank you yesu ben,I too noticed your soul in kind.your work is much futher up the vine,with your help I will slowly learn to climb
nancy from you I harvested the will to see
thank you

4 COMMENTS

  1. We seem to share the same vision ,
    Quietly pondering, meditation.
    We seek to soothe the waking sense,
    Wearied by humdrum and pretense.
    Fred, it’s feels great to meet a soul
    Who walks this path, and seeks the goal
    Desired but till now only rocks
    Line my path and this common box.
    Your poem demands a bit of thought,
    Punctuations but don’t be distraught;
    Some rhymes I feel are rather strained
    But the substance remains sustained.
    I love the last verse over all,
    Perfect meter, it can enthrall
    Overall it soothes me quite deep
    One work of art that I could keep.

  2. I think you have grown into your stride
    I like this poem, it does not waste words.
    it keeps a steady pace and rhythm
    you are a good student, I am a lousy teacher.
    so who has been tutoring or are you on your own just watching?
    my bedtime, even though I slept in,
    I need to catch up on that lost bit … I think.

  3. Aw, this was a really nice post. In idea I want to put in writing like this additionally — taking time and precise effort to make a very good article… but what can I say… I procrastinate alot and in no way seem to get something done.

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