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Is this a good story line?

There’s 5 teenagers all completely different people but they all live on the same street.
There’s 1 girl who’s the stereotype make-up hair boys cheerleader. Name : Bonnie
There’s another girl who’s into Art and is very imaginative. Name: Cassie
There’s a boy who’s very modest but all the girls fancy him but he doesn’t realize. Name : Adam
There’s another boy who’s the bad boy he like music has a record in jail for burglary and keeps to himself. Name : Dean
And there’s another boy who’s very spiritual and religious and has only 1 friend. Name: Lewis
They all go to the same high school.

They all live on the same street but don’t know each other really exist.
One day there’s some-kind of earthquake but only them 5 feel it.
This awakens all of there powers.

Bonnie: Influences people with Looks
Cassie: Draws precognitions
Adam: Makes people like him at 1st glance
Dean: Telepathic (Dangerous twist)
Lewis: PK (mouth things with mind)

They all find themselves in the same place after school one day and Dean realizes with his power that they all have these strange powers and all felt the Earthquake.

Something threatens the town they live in and they all have to use their powers to find and stop it.
There is a love triangle between Cassie Dean and Adam and Bonnie finds herself liking Lewis which will ruin her reputation.
They all lose their friends and end up being together all day in school (lunch and breaks)

Don’t know the ending just yet.

Is it a good story line ??
Constructive criticism only please only 14 years old 🙂
Thanks for your comments on the ‘Misfits’ program i honestly didn’t know that show even existed 🙂

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Hoogle
Hoogle
9 years ago

It’s a very good idea – but unfortunately as the others have pointed out it is extremely similar to Misfits.

Well, it seems you have a creative mind and good luck for your future escapades.

~Oasis Water~
~Oasis Water~
9 years ago

It’s a good story line, but it’s basically already been done in a TV show called Misfits.

SamOo
SamOo
9 years ago

sounds to me very similar to a tv series called ‘misfits’

<3Madi H<3
<3Madi H<3
9 years ago

Wow, thats really interesting! I’d love to read it! If I were you, Id go to storywrite.com and make an account and put it on there, so I can read it! Email me, madi.hughes@ymail.com, and let me know the name of the story and if you put it on there, so I can read it. Im only 13, btw. lol. Hope I can read it! (maybe you could go on my account on storywrite and read my stories, its about a girl named Kale, whos dad left her when she was younger, and ever since strange occurences have been happening,… Read more »

SummerAngel__x♫♥
SummerAngel__x♫♥
9 years ago

Sounds like a show on E4 called misfits Its almost exactly the same Five teenagers 3 boys 2 girls..they don’t live on same street or go school together but they meet doing community service and get caught in a storm, they then wake up with powers and one girl has the power to read minds and finds they all have powers, one boy uses his talent to see and change the future bit like the girl who draws the future. one girl can make people fall in love with her just by touch. Its very similar to what your idea… Read more »

This_Is_The_End
This_Is_The_End
9 years ago

I think its great… but it sounds a lot like Dark Visions by L.J Smith 🙂

celina
celina
9 years ago

I would read it, but I think the Artistic girl should be like…a Michelle or something lol sounds good though.

Zanaris
Zanaris
9 years ago

Very good.

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