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"What is called love"
The exact time and date of the occurance isn't clear
Coincidence or fate we took the same path
My soul was throbbing as i felt you within presence
Denser and denser my blood rushed and grew thicker.
My body defying gravity began to lift
Response of good karma or given to me by cupid
As a gift?
An attracting setting with a luminous figure!
Going deep inside my mind simulating all my five senses
Reciprocal to all five, I wondered if you were real
Paralyzed from the lips my eyes gazing
Began communicating to the enigmas figure
Trying to make sense of it all
But all I could do is just watch as you passed by into
Eternal oblivion, as I blinked twice
Reeling back into reality I realized this was the feeling
Of my heart flinging it gates open, showing affection for another
This was a one time occurance
Cannot be duplicated but can be imitated
This is what is called Love <3
what do u think??
In the future how can i publish some of my work??

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It's very good.. full of emotion and detail.
However, I would remove the "<3" from the last line 😉
Also, about your other question, send it in to your local newspaper or magazine. Look for sites online.
I would love your opinon on mine:
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AjZQY_uDEMGUoST.rjHvuWBp.Bd.;_ylv=3?qid=20081123140754AAPLihQ

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THUMBS UP!!!!

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It's amazing. You did a really wonderful job with the fluency of it all and the emotion you put into it. As for publishing it I really don't know. Sorry.
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I know it's really anoying when people do this but I really really really need some help. You don't have to answer but if you could please try....
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=ApXGXH5dynw48uWcar15_5_sy6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20081123123142AA8ZOtZ

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